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|Research||Context and Critical Analysis||Development||Initial Submission|
|Tutor Feedback||Reflection||Rework||Final Submission|
Firstly I want to thank you Keith for turning the tutor comments around quickly enough for me to meet my deadlines I could not have done it without you. Due to some really awful life stuff, I have been delayed way too far on this module and have had to finish it to a really tight deadline both for the module and the level, this has forced me to do things a certain way.
Now the specific reflection on the feed back.
Thanks for submitting the assignment Stephen.
The assignment requires students to create a series of images that allows the written word to play a part in their overall consideration.
The key issues I mentioned within my last feedback report were as follows:
- Try to establish a connection between the practitioners you have researched and your own work, through the written supporting texts, rather than relying solely on Pintrest links.
- Try to ensure all links on the blog are active and lead to something of use for the module, for when it comes to assessment.
- Broaden your research sources to include additional materials from more books, journals, essays etc … as opposed to just using on-line sources.
- Proofread all posts and remove all typo’s.
- Try to use in text citation within the written component of the submissions.
- Respond to Bate’s publication via the blog.
I can see that some of the feedback points are being addressed through the blog, but I think it will be more beneficial to assessment outcomes, if these are addressed more comprehensively.
I am attempting to address all of these points properly before assessment, as you know my focus has been on getting assignments 4 and 5 done before August 30th so some of the other points were deliberately postponed to get this done.
Feedback on assignment
Demonstration of technical and Visual Skills, Quality of Outcome, Demonstration of Creativity
I found these images to be a really interesting response to the brief and a real departure from earlier work submitted for assignments. The act of physically burning a photograph has been described by Barthes as one of the most ‘violent’ of acts, which can also be considered very final. The fact you have used this as a method to indicate the removal of an element or component of the image is quite intriguing and could certainly be contextualized at length.
I am glad it stimulated you, Its interesting to read your comment, I have been in quite a bad place for a while having lost both my Dad and my Mum, and for a long time after Dads death I kept it quite bottled and tried to carry on as usual, the subsequent death of my Mum and the stress of unemployment kind of uncorked the bottle, I was clearing out my Dads workshop in order to build a studio space for still life type photography. when it all came flooding out, objects like his pillar drill left me in floods of tears, which is where this project emerged from. I initially found the idea of redacting and produced the pillar drill image in the assignment but redacted it in photoshop with a black rectangle. This seemed too rigid and did not reflect the pain and loss. The idea of burning a hole was a response to this, as you say it is very final and the heat and flames involved in the process represent some of the emotion and the burned charred edges point to the finality of the loss. I found it a very powerful and purging experience to do this work and it has helped leave me in a better place,
I was also interested in reading within your critical analysis about the term ‘triggers for memory’ being used by Lamia in relation to objects and places. Of course one of the most obvious trigger for memory is the photograph itself, but it should be understood in that sense, the memory is something that happens in the present, being triggered by something (like a photo) from the past. So you just need to be clear, these object / places / photographs are not the ‘memory’ itself.
Ye Keith that is true, I see the photographs as an expression of the memory and the emotions that flow from it, I see them as a way of conveying that emotion to the viewer. The memory is a component of my personal semiotic world that I now like to refer to as my personal semiosphere. The images are a way of sharing my semiosphere with a wider audience. The interesting thing here is that while the wider audience might share and understand, they will never truly experience the contents of that semiospere or its emotions as they will always remain forever personal. I also think it may trigger the viewers own response to their own losses.
The work immediately made me think of Mishka Henner’s 2013 work entitled ‘Less Amercains’, which was created in response to Robert Frank’s important photographic book ‘The Americans’ (it was first released in France … thus was entitled ‘Les Americains’). Henner’s work will have plenty written about it and would therefore be useful in terms of trying to understand how your work sits within this field. The link for the work has been included below.
Interesting there is even a typology:
It was also interesting to note that the text you decided to work with was one you had written yourself. Although I thought this did work well with the imagery in almost literally describing what was happening in the work, it might also have been interesting to have sourced other texts that do a similar thing, but have been written by others. I’m certain there are plenty of these out there. if you dig around deep enough.
Keith I did this, it was in the development section, I looked at lots of texts but none really grabbed me and my reason for opting with my own text was to ground my work in my own emotion. The work is about my own loss and not the generic loss of a nation or the expressions of loss of an 18th century poet. My words are raw and from the heart, they express the original emotion that triggered thr project while I was clearing the workshop and so for me they felt right. I was also inspired by the Wonderland and Nocturne works of Kirsty Mitchell, who made both series to deal with the illness and loss of her mother. Nocturne is a dark brooding
It might be worth considering how this work could be engaged with by spectators now. This would offer the opportunity to explore different presentation methods and strategies for the work.
I like this Idea, time pressure prevents me from fully working with this so I will bank the idea for future modules, though I think you are right and the practice will be useful/
Demonstration of technical and Visual Skills, Demonstration of Creativity
Again, this is progressing as evidenced through the blog. But as I’ve mentioned continuously, an exercise needs to be conducted in order to proof read texts that have been posted. I’m constantly finding basic typo’s and also more alarmingly names being incorrectly spelt (Bathes rather than Barthes etc). This would be a simple exercise to conduct and would give the submission much more academic weight once submitted for assessment.
This proof read as mentioned before is underway, I had to meet a very strict deadline so did not do this before submitting to you.
In addition to this, I would probably consider trying to include more writing about the individual exercises and project. This is your opportunity to really try to demonstrate the breadth and depth of your research and reading etc.
Again I am working on this within the time limits, but the point is well noted for the future too.
I did note some in text citation happening here which was great to see.
Yes I have started doing more of this in response to your comments.
Context, reflective thinking, critical thinking, analysis
As previously mentioned, the sources you draw from with regards to the research need to be extended. I see that you have included many relevant texts which sit behind the ‘Book Reviews’ section of the blog, but the entries are predominantly descriptions of contents etc. You need to be able to demonstrate what has been specifically learnt from reading these texts, perhaps using the odd quote here or there in relation to a specific point or argument you are trying to enforce.
I have been doing this, I think the way the blog was set out did not make this obvious so I am going to try a different layout for Landscape
Context, reflective thinking, critical thinking, analysis
The ‘Photographers / Practitioners’ section of the blog is now progressing and including many worthy candidates for further scrutiny and analysis. I did note that the bottom of this section just contains names of photographers though, but I’m assuming this is also work in progress.
Still a work in progress it was left to last because of the time deadline
Look at Mishka Henner’s project ‘Less Amercians’ in relation to this work, which can be found here:http://mishkahenner.com/
Noted thank you for the link I am looking at this work.
Pointers for the next assignment / assessment
I have written this feedback at the same time as responding to the submission of assignment five, therefore all assignments are complete for this module at this stage.
The time deadline has been a major problem I will address this further at the end of A5 Fedback